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DIRECTIONS:
A. Study the following graphs carefully and write an essay in at least150 words.
B. Your essay must be written clearly on the ANSWER SHEET II.
C. Your essay should cover these three points:
1. effect of the country’s growing human population on its wildlife
2. possible reason for the effect
3. your suggestion for wildlife protection

各档次分数段例文
(15——13分)
From these graphs, we can draw a conclusion that, with the growth of human population, the number of species has decreased rapidly in America, and some species have even vanished from our planet.
Why does this phenomenon appear? I think there are several possible reasons for this. First, with a rapid growth of population, more and more people came to live where some wild species have been living. Then these species have to move to other places. Some of them probably cannot adapt to the new environment and die. Second, although many people look on the wildlife as their friends, some people may not think so. They catch a lot of wild animals and sell them in order to get more money. Third, with the development of the industry, the natural balance and the ecologic environment are destroyed. The deforestation has become more and more serious. So some of the wildlives become homeless and extinct.
In order to protect the wildlife, I have some suggestions. First, the governments should make laws to prevent them from being caught and killed. Second, the governments should educate people to love the nature and protect it. Third, as for ourselves, we should take practical actions to protect our living environment.

[评语] 内容符合要求，包括了图中说明“effect”的有关信息。语言流畅，层次分明，句式有变化，句子结构和用词正确，文章长度符合要求。但还有少数错误出现。

(9——7分)
As is show in the given graph, with the growth of U. S. population the number of species no longer existing in U. S. has greatly increased. The more population, the more wild species is extinct from the earth. What caused this phinomenon?
I think there are two reason for the effect. In the first place, with the increase of human being, the grain needed by people grow too. People demand more land to grow rice and wheat and to live. So the wildlife’s environment was destroyed. A large number of species have died out. Secondly, many people hunted various wildlife for their interest or only for their enjoyment.
In my opinion, wildfire are man’s friends. So we must protect wildlife. Personaly, I think first, the country must make laws to forbid hunting, Second, people should be educated to protect wildlife. At last, we must punish the men who hunt wild animals. The wildlife will be protected better and better.
[评语] 内容符合要求，包括了图中说明“effect”的有关信息，基本清楚地表达了其内涵。句子结构和用词有少量错误，个别是大错。文章长度符合要求。

(3——1分)
From tables, we can see that the country’s growing human population on its wildlife. It rise 250 from 1800 to 1900. I think, there at least two resasons. For one thing, some people want to return the nation. They free themself from hard works. For another some people love the wildlife. People’s life lever has risen fastly. On the second table, it is clear that the risen rate faster from 1800 to 1900 than from 1600 to 1800.
But, there are degened. Firstly, there are not secured. There are many harmful things in the wild. Secondly, the lead to traffic in the weekend. Because mostly people are freed in the same time.
As far as I am concerned, I think that people should paid much attention to the wildife
[评语] 基本按图写作，但语句支离破碎，只有少数句子可以理解，文章长度不符合要求。